You packed a lot of punch in each sentence, using great descriptive words, and often taking something that would have been funny but bland and just juicing it up a little. My only criticism is that it may have been a paragraph too long. However, it was very good and you may give Nunes a run for his money!!
Do you have much of a following yet? I don't know how people get followings but I will spread the word to my bball loving friends. However, I have to say that none of them read as voraciously as I do, and I can't get any of them to come on this board. I keep enticing...
Keep posting your pieces over here! It's not bad form to do so, is it?