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[QUOTE="supp, post: 698722, member: 702"]
You're right, Cohen was sent down there to cover Syracuse's formal entry into the ACC. And, yes, it appears that the Southern reporters have little interest in the new playmate from the north. But we as his readers already knew that. The rest of what he's written here comes across as more diary entry than article. The subtext is that he isn't terribly interested in his subject either. The problem is that he's writing for the Syracuse fanbase. No one wants a cheerleader press and the coach and program should be called to the mat when deserving. But he hasn't taken a professional approach here. Your readers want informative articles. You want to take this angle, how about you ask Shafer what his experience with the ACC press consisted of? What kind of questions were asked and what questions weren't? Was the coach himself surprised/disappointed with the reception? We as readers don't care what Cohen felt. He should be invisible in the piece.
 
This article comes across as an attempt to write for his portfolio for job interviews to me than it does journalism. I'd like to think that editors will see the immaturity in his writing when he sends them this.
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